Riko's Bio.

[riko]

Character's Name: Riko Amaha

Character's Gender: Female

Character's Race: Japanese

Character's Alliance: Normal Human

Character's Personality: Riko is an excellent cook. She is good at preparing things like pizza, soup, beef stew and baked goods. Everyone likes her cooking so much that they want her to cook for them a lot. The downside of her cooking is she sometimes burns some of her baked goods or accidentally adds too much of something to her food.

Riko makes friends easily. A lot of people like her. When people meet her they are often surprised by how mature and well-mannered she is, given her age. She she's always smiling and has a positive attitude and she's dressed well.

Riko is very caring of others. She helps people by making them feel good when there sad by making them laugh. Riko loves her mother Masane very much and would do anything to protect her mother.

Character's Appearance:

Riko possesses purple hair and brown eyes as she prefers cute and comfortable- casual clothing, Her outfit consists of a cute Blue girls top and a reddish pink skirt with pockets.

Sample of your RPGing style: Riko is Masane's Daughter. They have a lot of love for one another. Riko likes Mr. Takayama. They go on a get to know one another outing, But Rico has no idea that Mr. Takayama might be her Biological father. She also doesn't know that is why her mom planned the outing between her and Mr. Takayama.

[Lin Minanino]

Character's Name: Riko Amaha
Character's Gender: Female
Character's Race: Japanese
Character's Alliance: Normal Human

This is fine~. (:

Character's Personality: Riko is a Excellent cook. She is good with preparing Pizza, Soup, Stew beef, and baking goodies. Everyone likes her cooking. Everyone wants her to cook for them. The downside to her cooking is she sometimes burns some of her baked goods or adds to much of something by accident in her food.

Riko makes friends easily. A lot of people like her. When people meet her they see she's always smiling and has a positive attitude and she's dressed well.

Riko is very caring of others. She helps people by making them feel good when there sad by making them laugh. Riko loves her mother Masane very much and would do anything to protect her mother.

A few things are wrong with this. As I know you're still learning I'll list the things I'd like you to change:

• Excellent should be excellent
  
• She is good with preparing Pizza, Soup, Stew beef, and baking goodies should be written as follows: She is good at preparing things like pizza, soup, beef stew and baked goods.
  
• Everyone likes her cooking. Everyone wants her to cook for them. This should be: Everyone likes her cooking so much that they want her to cook for them a lot.
  
• The downside to her cooking should be: The downside of her cooking
  
• or adds to much of something by accident in her food should be: or accidentally adds too much of something to her food.
  
• I'd also add to the second paragraph that when people meet her they are often surprised by how mature and well-mannered she is, given her age.
  
• If I think of anything else I'll add it after you fix these things. (:

Character's Appearance:

Riko possesses purple hair and brown eyes as she prefers cute and comfortable- casual clothing, Her outfit consists of a cute Blue girls top and a reddish pink skirt with pockets.

This is fine. =D

Sample of your RPGing style: Riko is Masane's Daughter. They have a lot of love for one another. Riko likes Mr. Takayama. They go on a get to know one another outing, But Rico has no idea that Mr. Takayama might be her Biological father. She also doesn't know that is why her mom planned the outing between her and Mr. Takayama.

Like with Masane this is history and not a real rp sample. It's also written in first person when it should be in third. However I'll let it slide this time so long as you agree to work with my via pm or in a thread on how to improve your writing a bit. ^_^

[Lin Minanino]

Character's Name: Riko Amaha
Character's Gender: Female
Character's Race: Japanese
Character's Alliance: Normal Human

This is fine. (:

Character's Personality: Riko is a excellent cook. She is good with preparing things like Pizza, Soup, Stew beef, and baking goodies. Everyone likes her cooking so much that they want her to cook for them a lot. The downside of her cooking is she sometimes burns some of her baked goods or accidentally adds to much of something in her food.

Riko makes friends easily. A lot of people like her. When people meet her they are often surprised by how mature and well-mannered she is, given her age. She she's always smiling and has a positive attitude and she's dressed well.

Riko is very caring of others. She helps people by making them feel good when there sad by making them laugh. Riko loves her mother Masane very much and would do anything to protect her mother.

Better. ^^ There are still just a couple things I want you to fix.

• Riko is a excellent cook. Change this to Riko is an excellent cook.
  
• The second sentence should be: She is good at preparing things like pizza, soup, beef stew and baked goods. Note that you don't need to make each item capitalized. (:
  
• The final part of the first paragraph should be written like this: or accidentally adds too much of something to her food. (to as in "to go to the store" while too as in "too much of a good thing". (: )

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Character's Appearance:

Riko possesses purple hair and brown eyes as she prefers cute and comfortable- casual clothing, Her outfit consists of a cute Blue girls top and a reddish pink skirt with pockets.

Sample of your RPGing style: Riko is Masane's Daughter. They have a lot of love for one another. Riko likes Mr. Takayama. They go on a get to know one another outing, But Rico has no idea that Mr. Takayama might be her Biological father. She also doesn't know that is why her mom planned the outing between her and Mr. Takayama.

This is fine. (:

[Lin Minanino]

Approved!